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Heyo! I'm Korra and I would really appreciate some CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM on the first chapter of my story. There's a prologue in there too but I assume the critic would be pretty much the same.

I am aware that too long sentences and too much description are the problems (at least that's what I've been told), but I would really like the opinion of someone who doesn't know me. 

Also, I'm not native English so please feel free to tell if there's any grammar/vocabulary mistake I've made.


Izabel Tepes, Dracula's daughter, comes to England to enroll in Corvus Sanguineus Academy, a prestigious school for vampires with the purpose of locating her father's long time enemy - Van Helsing. However, she soon realizes that an infamous vampire hunter is the least of her problems as faces the tremendous troubles of being a regular teenager.