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Laviey replied in Constructive criticism please?

Us two co-authors, would very much appreciate some CONSTRUCTIVE criticism on our story. It is probably not the greatest as we have never taken any classes or anything. The title is awful as well. That is not what the title will end up being in the the end we just want to finish the story before we come up with the title. Here is part of the story: 

https://plotfactory.com/stories/preview/94e9914d-d68d-480b-b2b5-40b31d5a97d0

 Thanks so much!

P.S  We are not looking for criticism on punctuation as we already have someone editing. 

P.P.S If you see the word WAVE it just means that it was moving on to another scene.